Thursday, September 18, 2008

Jaadoogari nigaah ki

Jaadoogari nigaah ki, samjhaake jaayiye
aaye hai hosh mein abhi, abhi na jaayiye...

Pehloo mein aaj aapke, jo berang hogaye
kehte hai gul vo aap se, mehkaake jaayiye

Liptii hai dil se aap ke, jo raazdaar hai
naam us kitaab mein meraa, likhkarke jaayiye

jugnuu khayaal-e-yaar ke, apne chiraag hai
subho kabhii to laayiye, ghar aake jaayiye

hone lage hai hum bhi kuch, mashhoor shehar mein
aise hi roz dekhiye, muskaake jaayiye

- Kaunquest

7 comments:

Ankita Datta said...

Nice song !!!

komal mehta said...

hey this couplet is really awesome...very filmy! :)

thanx for all your comments on my blog...

do excuse me for delayed replies.

Suma said...

Aise hi roz aaiye, khyaal bataate jaaiye (i mean comment chodkar jaaiye ;-) ).

Did not follow line no. 7: jugnuu khayaal-e-yaar ke, apne chiraag hai

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Azam Khan said...

Ajay, I am always mesmerized by the imagination of poets. You have some nice ideas in this song (poem).

One issue I notice is that of weight (wazan). In Urdu poetry, wazan makes quite a bit of difference. I see the first sher is getting slightly out of weight.

For example, "aaye hai hosh mein abhi, abhi to na jaayiye" would be in wazan as "aye abhi hain hosh mein, abhi na jaiyee". However, the latter takes away some of the intensity from the "iltejaa" (request) made in it.

Like it a lot. Can you write something on "the good memories of the past"?

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Bhuvana said...

hi
u had left a comment on my blog quite sometime back, thnks, this is not the right place to say this but thnks again :)