Wednesday, November 22, 2006

tujhe chuune se...

tujhe chuune se Dartaa hoon, bijlii na utar jaaye seene mein
tujhe dekhaa hi kartaa hoon, bas iskaa hi mazaa haaye jeene mein

reshmi raaton mein aate hain, terii zulf ke naag Das jaate hain
zahareelii yaadon mein GhuTtaa hoon, mai roz hi jeeta hoon, martaa hoon

jazbaa-e-dil ko samjhaa hi nahiin, betaab nazar ko jaanaa hi nahiin
tere saath hii chaltaa rehtaa hoon, phir bhi mai tanhaa hoon, tanhaaa hoon

16 comments:

Krithika said...

i dun und hindi..watever it is u have a nice blog out here

Alapana said...

I dint like the first stanza in the second para,maybe the word "zulf ke naag das jaate hain" dint appeal to me,Because poetry is a visual treat also,each of the line portrays a dream,a scene which we imagine,the pain which you show is loosing its beauty or the passion is loosing out with that line.I am sorry,i am only trying to say what i felt,hope you dont mind.
the last para was excellent,i loved the last stanza very much.

What happened to your template? we are unable to see it.or is it only me?

Dawn....सेहर said...

jazbaa-e-dil ko samjhaa hi nahiin, betaab nazar ko jaanaa hi nahiin
tere saath hii chaltaa rehtaa hoon, phir bhi mai tanhaa hoon, tanhaaa hoon


waise to insaan bhid mein bhi tanha ho le aur nahi to phir akele mein bhi logon ke saath rahe - saaya jo saath de jaaye :)
Good work
cheers

idiot said...

i like this... i love this...
good one.

Ajay said...

Bhai waah. Bahut badhiya

kaunquest said...

@Krithika - thanks
@alapana - point taken :) the imagery of those lines is not exactly soothing/romantic! I think, it was a result of the thought process behind that poem itself. It alludes to something on the dark side..
no one complained before. Which browser are u using?
@dawn - duniyaa se duur yoon tanhaa hi mai chaluun :)
@dear friend, create a new blogger ID.. idiot doesnt suit u. Thanks buddy :)
@ajay, we share the same name. Saw your blog, liked the design. Thank you too :)

chandni said...

devastatingy beautiful :)

emotions said...

Hello hai ji again se !!!

Aap to aur bhi shair ho gaye hain
kamal ho gaya
completely rocking hai ji beautiful hai ji!!!

Keep Smiling:-)

All d bst !!

Anil Sinha said...

Wah! :-)

Manish said...

Naya Saal Mubaarak ho aur aap tanhayi ke andheron se bahar niklein !:)

.:: Rosh ::. said...

Waah! this gave a 'mein aur meri tanhaai...' feeling to me, very nicely written.

kaunquest said...

chandni, emotions, anil, manish & rosh,
Thanks for your appreciation :) I was away from blogging for sometime now.. Looks like, its going to be so for few more days atleast :(
Please do keep visiting and I hope to post something soon.. :))

Khan Sahab said...

What a thought, very unique very creative:

reshmi raaton mein aate hain, terii zulf ke naag Das jaate hain

zahareelii yaadon mein GhuTtaa hoon, mai roz hi jeeta hoon, martaa hoon

Excellent, Love it !!!

kaunquest said...

HI khan, thanks buddy! Long time since i updated this :)

Sandhya said...

..........
jazbaa-e-dil ko samjhaa hi nahiin, betaab nazar ko jaanaa hi nahiin
tere saath hii chaltaa rehtaa hoon, phir bhi mai tanhaa hoon, tanhaaa hoon...

Wah... I love this one!

Murali said...

Found some time to tune this.